Peer Review Daniel DeGeorges
TASK ORIENTATION:Does the essay follow the task? How do you know this? Look at the assignment itself and the guidelines given. Yes, as it details how the topic has affected the author personally.
STRUCTURE: Locate the thesis–and say it in your own words to be sure you understood it. Now find the topic sentences. Does each topic sentences sum up or introduce its paragraph effectively? I cannot figure out the thesis sentence from this essay. However the topic sentences are well done and introduce the paragraphs very well.
SUPPORT & ANALYSIS: Is evidence being used for any and all statements made? Does the author introduce, analyze, and explain the evidence? What’s the strongest piece of evidence? Yes. The strongest evidence is in the second to last paragraph which entirely details how technology helped the author.
ORGANIZATION: Does the paper read smoothly? Are there parts that seem out of place or confusing? (Mark these. Give suggestions if possible.) Add any transitions that would make the organization smoother: While it does not flow without coherence, it does jump around a lot. There needs to be a clear ending to each paragraph.
CLARITY: Write what you consider:
The clearest sentence: Technology helped me with research I needed to do for a certain class and also technology was able to correct my work.
The Most confusing sentence: Even though I had my struggles in school I was still able to get over it and find myself now in college.
PROOFREADING: Note here any suggested changes in wording, grammar, punctuation, or spelling: The formatting is off and should be corrected to the standards laid out in the prompt.
OVERALL: What single change would make the most improvement in this essay? Combining multiple sentences into single, well structured sentences.
Peer Review Rita Zou
TASK ORIENTATION: Does the essay follow the task? How do you know this? Look at the assignment itself and the guidelines given. yes, it talks about how him and how the topic has an impact on his life
STRUCTURE: Locate the thesis–and say it in your own words to be sure you understood it. Now find the topic sentences. Does each topic sentences sum up or introduce its paragraph effectively? I can’t find the thesis. The topic sentence was there but a bit weak
SUPPORT & ANALYSIS: Is evidence being used for any and all statements made? Does the author introduce, analyze, and explain the evidence? What’s the strongest piece of evidence? Yes, in the third paragraph it talks about how websites helped his studies in school
ORGANIZATION: Does the paper read smoothly? Are there parts that seem out of place or confusing? (Mark these. Give suggestions if possible.) Add any transitions that would make the organization smoother: The point was being made but I felt like it needs some work.
CLARITY: Write what you consider
The clearest sentence: “No matter what the reason was attending different schools delayed my studies and put me behind the other students.”
The most confusing sentence: “Spelling was always a problem for me also because of course if I wasn’t able to read at my grade level I would be able to write how I was supposed to.”
PROOFREADING: Note here any suggested changes in wording, grammar, punctuation, or spelling: Some sentences need punctuations to better understand it.
OVERALL: What single change would make the most improvement in this essay? Combining multiple sentences into single, well structured sentences.
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